Evaluation: Self as a Peer Responder December 5, 2006

Quote three specific pieces of feedback (not the whole responses, just parts of a response) that you recieved on your work that were particularly helpful to you in revising (not editing, revising the content).  Include links to these coments.

1. “The only thing I can think of to “address” is where you wrote, “I am suggesting that a team be assembled” -I would maybe list the professionals that would be included in that “team”. “- Missy

2. “One thing to address is that you are writing from a “young” child’s perspective -how young is this child? I’m wondering because you used some difficult terms: disorder, diagnosis, physician, aspirating, & breakthrough. Is the child at an age where he/she would understand these terms?” – Missy

3. “I would like to address the lack of statistical information in the letter. I think that it may help proving your case.” – Sara

Quote three specific pieces of feedback (not the whole responses, just parts of responses) that you gave to someone else that you believe were most likely helpful to them in revising their own work. Include links to these comments.

1. “I think that you should address putting into the entry how the mother is reacting to all of this, also to demonstrate how the child thinks they are reacting to it all. It would demonstrate to the audience how certain things are handled and explained.” - Whitney H. for Emma

2. “I think that you should address using normal. What do you mean by that? Maybe if you gave another word or so, normal wouldn’t seem so cliche!”  -Whitney H. for Holly

3. “I would like to address the issue of having no examples. I think that to make the letter seem more heartfelt, examples such as certain cases or feelings/emotions would help the letter. ” – Whitney H. for Holly

Examine examples of the first two items above and write about what this information tells you about the kind of responses you give.

By reading the examples of the comments that I give, I do not believe that I am specific enough. I also think that I play it safe when giving feedback to others.  I Do not want to offend anyone, and in the end, most likely do because it seems as though I do not put effort into reviewing their work.  I also need to be much more in depth in the comments that I give to others.  Sometimes when writting comments, I know what I am trying to explain to them, but it’s hard for me to put it into my own words so that they are able to understand it.  I give very vague, undetailed comments that need much work.

Write a goal (behavioral objective) for yourself as a peer responder.  Specificically (this is an important word as I do not mean generally), the next time you participate in a peer response groip, what do you intend to do differently?

I will think critically about the works and what they are trying to accomplish before beginning to comment on any aspect of the document.  I will also be more detailed and desciptive in my feedback.